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Post by Zagham on Jun 23, 2008 18:17:57 GMT 6
ye gazal main nay aik sal phelay sukhanwar pr bhaji thi . matlay k izafay k sath yahan arsal ker raha hoon. islah aur tanqeed ka muntazir rahoon ga
ya ilahi aik khulqat soch k us par gum
kis bala ne ker diay yukbar hi ghar bar gum
hadsa guzra hay janay ab ke kia is pair per
aashianay hain parindon k magar chahkar gum
kia khabar kia mor lay gi zindagi is martaba
ho gaiy hain is fasanay k kai kirdar gum
aankh bus jhapki thi main nay aik lamhay k liay
aur shaher-e-yar k pae dar-o-deewar gum
chheen li hain waqt nay sub zaoq ki ranaian
kar-e-dunia main hoay hain hum bhi aakhir kar gum
dr zagham abidi
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Post by Atif Mirza on Jun 24, 2008 0:43:09 GMT 6
Aray Dr Sahib! KiyooN sharminda kartay haiN. Bhalaa itnay manjhay huway kalaam per tanqeed ka hosla ho ga kissi ko. Bhai hum maiN tau nahiN. Itna napa tulaa andaaz.
Bus aik lafz pallay nahiN paRa, "Matlay" maiN "ghulqat" kia hai, Kia yeh "Khalqat" tau nahiN. Kia spelling mistake hai ya koi nayaa lafz hai. Barah-e-karam wazahat farmaa dijiay, shayad hamari kum ilmi maiN kami waqe ho.
Dr sahib 8 Oct 2005 kay zalzalay kay doraan maiN Abbotabad maiN tha, aap ki ghazal nay woh waqt yaad dilaa diya. Such poochaiN tau maiN yeh samajh sakaa hooN keh aap nay yeh ghazal ya tau Zalzalay kay baaray maiN likhi hai ya kissi aur qomi mas'alay per.
Aap shaan-n-nazool bayaan farmaiN gay tau hunm aur kuchh arz karbnay kay qabil hoN gay.
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Post by Zagham on Jun 25, 2008 18:30:51 GMT 6
jinab aatif sahib
ye spelling mistake ho gai hauy. ye lafz KHALQAT hay.aap nay theek kaha is ghazal k baz asshar main nay zalzalay k bad hi kahay thay. aap kay tabsaray nay mujhay sherminda ker dia hay. main nay ye ghazal waqei islah ki gharz say bheji hay. aur aap jaisay seniors ki rahnumai hi mujhay darkar hay
dr zagham abidi
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Post by Atif Mirza on Jun 25, 2008 21:53:15 GMT 6
Dr Zaigham!
Ghazal kay matlay maiN lafz khalqat aap ki ijazat talab kiay baghair hi durust kar diya hai.
Aap ki ghazal ki hum kia islaah karaiN, Haan Razi sb aur Rafi sb maiN say koi aik yeh kaam sar anjaam day tau day.
Hum tau bhai kuchh nahiN jantay.
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Post by Bilal Mirza on Jun 25, 2008 22:09:55 GMT 6
Hi Doc!
Kia ghazal hai janab aur aap kehe hain keh aap ko islaah ki zaroorat hai. Jinab bohot achi shaeri hai. Bakhuda lutf aa gaya. daad hazir hai...
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Post by Sania Sajjad on Jun 25, 2008 22:41:46 GMT 6
ye gazal main nay aik sal phelay sukhanwar pr bhaji thi . matlay k izafay k sath yahan arsal ker raha hoon. islah aur tanqeed ka muntazir rahoon ga ya ilahi aik khulqat soch k us par gum kis bala ne ker diay yukbar hi ghar bar gum hadsa guzra hay janay ab ke kia is pair per aashianay hain parindon k magar chahkar gum kia khabar kia mor lay gi zindagi is martaba ho gaiy hain is fasanay k kai kirdar gum aankh bus jhapki thi main nay aik lamhay k liay aur shaher-e-yar k pae dar-o-deewar gum chheen li hain waqt nay sub zaoq ki ranaian kar-e-dunia main hoay hain hum bhi aakhir kar gum dr zagham abidi
masha Allah. aik mukammal ghazal ataa ki hai aap ne. Sada andaz, sada behr aur khoob crefiting aor alfaz ka chnao.
bahot si daad hazir hai.
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Post by Zagham on Jun 26, 2008 12:17:29 GMT 6
jinab bilal sahib aur sania sahiba
ghazal pasand kernay ka bohot shukria
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